I'm actually not entirely familiar with this piece but I can appreciate the complexity and work that went into remixing it. There are some aspects of the mix that need improved. For instance, the wide panned, chorused, and spaced out elements are all quite loud relative to bass, kick, snare, and other elements. I think this detracts a lot from the piece and drains energy from what should be super amped and in your face. Mostly the section through 5 minutes suffers from this.
I will probably have to leave time stamps for my remaining critique.
6:15 was a good transition! The following section of rap/poetic delivery was well written but could use just a bit clearer diction, and the following section suffers from the same mixing issues as earlier, very loud pads and leads, and kick/snare/bass very quiet in the mix.
However, I absolutely applaud the ambition and arrangement overall. I think this song is many things at once, at times to its detriment and at times to its strength. A near ten minute mix is a monster of a track. Kudos for having time to finish it at all! Great work!