Interesting pitch shift vocals in the intro. I think the higher pitch in the right could come down some to match the lower pitch ones. Appreciating the modulations there as we gradually increase in pitch.
I also really enjoy your writing and fast paced drums. What I find lacking however, is the snare and kick are not cutting through the mix well. The drums should be the loudest in the mix, meaning snare and kick respectively. Manually ducking the volume of bass and other instruments (or sidechain) will help a lot in this regard!
The metal drum section at 1:40 is a vibe! I really like that.
Your melodies are quite interesting and hectic. Nice work there.
One detraction is that the sub bass is loud, but it is not necessarily audible. I recommend taking it down a notch and doubling with a more audible bass instrument. You may even find something like CS Bass One (free) to do the job there.
Arrangement wise, I really think you are onto something. This was an experience to listen to despite issues of mix, including a bit of muddy reverb.
One additional thing, mastering compression would really help the volume of this track out. There are several free online mastering services if you do not have the money for plugins or time to get that down. Personally I like to use emastered for those situations (not a paid advertisement, definitely costs money)
Overall, enjoyed the piece a lot. Keep at it!
Thanks for coming out to NGADM!