A lot of great melodic ideas here. Congratulations on your first song on NG. It's missing a bassline, and you could definitely make use of a more conventional structure. The intro feels as naked as an outro, and by 2:03, I feel like we've been in either a build or an intro for a very long time, especially by 2:30.
Without a bassline, 2:41 doesn't hit as hard as it should. That said with those small fixes this would be a pretty nice little track. Great work, and a fantastic start.
Keep it up! Let me know if you want any help resources or tips or tricks :)