Interesting but pretty random. I like the 808 drum elements. Those sound good. I'm very confused on a lot of the wooshing and the piano seems not to really go with the rest of the song. I recommend maybe some study on YouTube of music theory and song structure, and I think your ideas will start to come together nicely. You can also follow bedroomproducer's blog to get some new instruments that will help you along the way -- there are plenty of free instruments available online