Lyrically, vocal performance included, and in terms of ideal, this is FIRE.
Mix wise, it sounds like the whole track has had low pass thrown on it, and that causes some issues of clarity. If you wanted to keep this, I would do it selectively, or not as aggressively.
I would like more of the background shouts, more takes, that is. They're great for effect.
The kick is a bit subby and could use a grittier attack. Snare could come up in the mix. Cymbals also sound rolled into oblivion but I believe if you didn't have the aggressive low pass, they would be too loud. Perhaps take them down and bring back some of the high end there.
I want to hear more of the bass, and less of the low end of the guitar -- more high mid there.
Vocals could be more differentiated in terms of panning where vocalist 1 and 2 come in -- could also be more compressed -- and overall brought up .2 dB. The low pass could remain in place with a notch or two in the mids.
Great work!