I can tell you put a lot of effort into this track from how busy everything sounds. A lot of what holds me back from rating higher can be summed up in a few words, sound selection and mix.
As far as sound selection, some of these synths are just god awful to listen to outside of Videogame genre. Namely the FL-Slayer style guitar, if not dressed up -- it's just an old, tired sound. With good mixing, it can be okay, but I would keep looking if you want an actual guitar sound. (I do post free music resources to my userpage, where you can get some ideas)
Mix wise, a lot is going wrong:
- drums are hard to hear over guitars and other melody/harmony instruments
- bass is almost completely inaudible
- lots of melodic elements are competing in the same space, at around the same key range and volume
This is making the choice of instruments sound even worse -- we are hearing instruments the brain generally associates with lo-fi/low quality in conditions that don't allow them to shine.
A little self-study of mixing/volume leveling on YouTube will help you here, a LOT. And secondarily, I would study a bit of arrangement as well. Picking and choosing what you want to focus on in a given section of track is important, to avoid busy elements running all over each other.
Besides that though, I can hear interesting melodic ideas and a good understanding of rhythm. Keep at it!
5.3/10