I think my comments would fit in line with those left by @Troisnyx almost completely, with the exception of production and mix.
Your articulations and use of varied texture keep the piece exciting, but also from being super intelligible. I realize this isn't your intent so much as to suit the art, but I'm judging without art in mind. There are some decisions I think still to be made, that would help things along, namely compression on the drums, which aren't always to the fore in the mix, probably also changing out that cello/clarinet soundfont for something less obviously an emulation of a real instrument. Any synth just about will do.
I also feel the bass line on verses is quite busy for me to understand what function chords are serving. However the piece is brave enough to make most everything work, only sacrificing professional polished sound for an eerie amateur Steam game vibe.
Thanks for coming out to NGAUC!